Hey, T... I finally got around to this. Glad to see the quality of your work is as good as ever. This one started off a bit slow, but true to your style, it built up into a fun climax as the episodes progressed. I suspect that you have something big planned for future seasons because you've left interesting threads hangs all over the place. Your world-building and character development, along with the art, are as good as ever. Not sure what's holding back the rating on this one. Sometimes I think people see lots of click-through words and run away screaming.
I like the way you're breaking the story into "seasons" with individual but interconnected stories. The cases start off rather plain, but I imagine that your goal in the earlier episodes was to introduce characters. The mystery grows with each episode, and as it develops, the thought and research you've put into the material starts to become apparent. It starts to get really good in "Fade Away," when you allow the preternatural aspects of the world seep back into your story. Not seeing any branching paths yet, but there are some conversations that can take drastically different turns if suspects are questioned properly. I like the part where you choose when to signal Michelle to play "bad cop." Not so much the "hanging" scene where you have to click on things in the right order.
This seems to be taking place concurrently with the original Chloe tale, so I'm wondering where you're going with it. The links to the Elsa-verse are appreciated. It's nice to see some new characters... Janneke and the main villain clearly have powers, and Michelle seems to have a minor one. Also, great to see Marc and Jessica again (she's still my favorite :) ), and Mortze outdid himself with Miranda this time around. Maybe I'm forgetting something, but that power trio at the end are new characters, right? They didn't appear Xara's gang last time, so I'm curious as to where you're going with this. Maybe she has more contacts than we know? Also, I'd almost like to say that you should continue to develop the "father/daughter" dynamic between Blake and Michelle as opposed to ever making her a love interest, but your fans may expect the option. Maybe add some conversation choices that lead to different relationship outcomes between them?
The manuscript is in very good shape. When I hit the point where the cop says, "w-i-e-r-d," I thought, "Damn, I'd better let her know," and then Michelle says something like, "Can't spell, asshole?" There's a spot where Michelle says "Black" instead of "Blake," but I don't remember where. I'll tell you if I see it.
One thing I'd like to suggest is the option to select which episode we start with. My browser went down toward the end of episode 5, and I had click through the whole game to get back to where I was (hadn't saved.) Or did I miss it?
I'll keep an eye out for the rest of the story. Do keep up the good work. You and Mortze are an excellent team, and many people appreciate the work you put into your writing.