It's great but some of the grammar SERIOUSLY needs to be improved. There's so many missing words, full stops and repeated words and it just ruins the flow at some points. Other than that it's great, the artwork is fantastic, the animations are smooth, the game is actually FUN, the writing is good and has personality (ignoring grammar) and there's loads of smart little detail added. Just held back by grammar.
Edit: Oh and the music's great and the sound design is good for the most part, just maybe add some sound effects to clicking the buttons in the menus?