I thought it was cool.

To be far this is not that bad of a video but I didn't watch more than 30 seconds of it.

The main reason I didn't watch more of it was that people normally don't like reading in text on a video, even if you did all the voices your self on a £5 phone; that would of earned a lot more watch time and be a lot more entertaining of a video.

Skipping randomly I found the image at "2:47" was almost unreadable, if you don't get voices consider writing the text in pen to make them stand out from everything else.

story wise (from what I've seen skipping through) you seem to be able to write a story well enough in terms of a start, middle and an end. You might think this is obvious to you but a lot of animators struggle to remember this a times and even forget it completely, so try and hang on to your story telling ability whatever you do next.

Overall keep trying new things and enjoying what you make and you'll be making amazing stuff in no time!

This could be good if it was animated, this is nothing more than a storyboard