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That final battle really was something else! :) Feels like the backgrounds are kind of inconsistent (the one with the door and the jar of pencils... compared to everything else), but I guess that kind of goes with the series. Trademark inconsistencies. Always good fun though, keep it going!

-cd-


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There's a lot of room for improvement here. Normally I'm fine with simple character designs, but man, most of the characters have the same head and body shape, just with different clothes. A good chunk of the animation was filled with tweens, if you're gonna go with a simple art style at least try to make the animation expressive. Most of the time the hands are just drawn as circles, which looks pretty lazy, and even when there is fingers they look really sloppy.The writing and humor wasn't terrible, but it wasn't that great either. A lot of the jokes just come from characters screaming which gets annoying fast, and the story isn't really interesting. The fight scene did look really nice, props to the guy who did that. You seem like you have a good amount of potential and I can appreciate the fact that you did a whole 11 minute cartoon, but you gotta work on your stuff more.


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Most of the complaints I have towards this were basically the exact same ones I had for the last roommates episode. the animation sucks, none of the posing or framing is interesting in the slightest, the story itself is really unimaginative, none of the jokes really work, etc. there's two things about this that i would specifically like to talk about tho. first off, the animation Landon did. i think the mixing of the 2 styles is reaaaallllllyyyyy weird and awkward, especially because most of the time the change between styles is just completely random and not for a specific reason. there was one shot where one of the characters turned their head, with animation by landon, then when he wasnt moving and was just talking, it was animated by joseph. that doesn't work??? why even include his non-fight scene animation if it doesnt even have a reason for being there????? landon's animation itself is whatever, the fight scene looked fine but everything else he did looked really wonky and gross. secondly, i'd like to talk about the voice acting. none of the voice actors are good, but Gerardo's is the one i wanna focus on for obvious reasons. dan's voice is really annoying in general but something i noticed is that his voice never changes between him screaming and being excited from just talking normally. why though??? take a character like spongebob, who has a high voice. he sounds loud and squeaky when he's excited or yelling, but when he's speaking normally he's obviously calm and a little more monotone. you can't have a character talk in the same tone of voice for every emotion.

get better!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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Hey Joseph. Im Uniox7 on youtube. This is my new fav episode because you and landon did an amazing job in this episode. and that fight scene tho :0. im changing my ng and yt to 7Cheezits btw. AWESOME EPISODE! :D



couldnt get past 2 minutes with all the shouting. learn about compressors,


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May 26, 2018
11:16 AM EDT
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Comedy - Original
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  • Daily 3rd Place May 27, 2018