This has lots of potential. The art was nice and there were some cool animation bits in there too. The biggest problem was the narration. It was very hard to understand because of the accent. I understand you're not a native English speaker and I'm not trying to insult you. I'm just saying that if you're doing an animation in English either have subtitles for the narration or (I consider this to be the better idea) ask for help from a voice actor on Newgrounds. Just go into the forums and find the help wanted part. Then just post what you need and wait for someone to reply. I hope you make more of these.