This is my Submission for the DBZ Collab that Iv'e entered in. This is a DBFZ Parody that is about the games new traditional 2D animation style that is out for the PS4 see what happens when there’s competish. But mine was not added in because I didn’t make it correctly hopefully next time. Please let me know what else I can do to improve. thank you.
Nice
This one here is Entertainment a Grand adventure with various ideas Utilised in just the right way, you have Earned some points from me on this one so nice effort. love the action scenes in this one, really good character work aswell this was randomly funny
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Nothing really it was pretty solid.
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Aww thanks man that means a lot but I do see what I need to improve of course such as lighting and shading which I will be having for now on in my animations in cartoons. Thank you so much for your review of course next ones will be even better.
At 0:22 the teeth don't move with its mouth/head which looked really bad. Your drawing styles expressive but your colors are really eye irritating. Tone down the saturation on your color palettes next time. Some of the animations don't even have frame by frame and mostly relied on skews and tweens that looked off. Humor was not to my taste and was just two guys screaming at a game lol Only part I chuckled was the part with the realistic teeth. Overall, this wasn't that good and I think you can do better.
0:22 I actually did that on purpose cause I thought it would look funnier that way. And yes Iv'e noticed that most people are not using black outlines anymore or at least have all kinds of colors for there cartoons but I will be having lighting and shading in my next ones for sure just didn't realize it was that big of a deal but it is here on ng so i'll be doing that. Yeah I guess I was working on the tweens too much as well my bad about that. Iv'e just seen so many people before use tweens to rely on was well but i'll mostly stick to traditional at first. Thank you for your helpful review. I'll be having lighting and colors.
The animation is really well done!
Aw thank you very much! I try. But I'm going to try even harder next time. I'm not even getting started yet ;)
The animation and art were pretty nice. Humor could have been a bit less random and extreme. The voice acting was also pretty good. Also only about half of the video is animation, the rest is sketches/storyboards/I don't know. Usually you only include a bit of that while the credits roll or something.
Yeah I guess I’ll cut that out. Wish Swfs would work so you can click on buttons again. No more havin your own menu screen or options.
Dude you need 4 more things to join collab:
1) More dicks
2) More penises
3) Detalisation
4) Being ga...introvert.
Yeah I guess I’ve just noticed I forgot about that. Thank you. But what do the last two mean? 3.an 4? And I'll be sure too have lighting and shading next time too.