i can tell you made an effort with it. the main issue with this is the overall quality of the work. i'm not saying go get an art tablet and an amazing computer (because i know that's not possible for some or required to make art), but there are some things i noticed that you could probably improve on right away:
first things first, i see your little power director watermark you got there. so i'm guessing you own a windows 10 or 8 os? if you own anything under 10 or upgrade to 10, you should have windows movie maker preinstalled on your computer. use that instead! it'll make a similar product to this but without the watermark. if you don't have the program just google search free video editing software for windows! test things out and have fun with experimenting. and of course, you can continue using this software if you would like. just trying to help because i had to deal with watermarks and they annoyed me personally.
some of the images are pretty blurry. it took me a minute to read the text in the bubble at 0:44. making sure your images are clear will help your audience out and make the video easier to watch.
anyways, this wasn't a bad concept at all. the execution wasn't great, really. but i've watched your other stuff you have interesting ideas. keep it up!