It's a good narrative/anecdote, but it feels slightly rushed. If there were a few pauses added between sentences here and there (like paragraph breaks), the listener/reader could have time to properly imagine this scene in his/her mind. It's a very minor quibble, if nothing else, imagine you're telling the story to someone.. at times you'll pause and wait for someone to react or reflect internally, if they haven't already.
The ez animation's okay, though the way the scenes were laid out on the screen, especially w/ the text below, seemed off center in some spots. Flip phone? Guess this did happen a while ago.
Yeah, add a little more time drawing per frame, I don't mind placeholder graphics, but in this case lol, some of the frames were poor. Well told story, generally well paced, graphics lame, but varied enough, what animation there was, was appropriate. 1/2 star extra, because you're in the Discord ;)