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In Episode 7 (Police top meet you) Cal becomes a detective in training and helps track down a Cereal Killer (pun intended).
It's good. Some nice little jokes here and there.
My only suggestion is that right now it seems a part like part 7 instead of episode 7.
The difference being, this feels like a movie split into several parts, instead of an episode you might find in a series.
Don't change it, it's good they all link together. But maybe allow the script to imply what as happened before. Not so much in a sense that it's annoying for those who had watched the previous episodes.
Not the easiest things to do, but just something to bear in mind and you'll do it better each time :P
Thanks heaps for the critique! I appreciate the time you took to give me your thoughts and criticism, and will certainly take this all into account as the series develops.
I can promise you, as I'm now working on episode 17, episodes 11 through to 20 are almost an entirely different show; better executed and has more of an identity and quality to it. I hope you continue watching as it evolves :)
At last, someone did something the right way with GoAnimate. You may get a cold response for a while, simply because normally, GoAnimate submissions are average in their construction, have poorly done, robotic voices, and a half-ass story. And often, they're just plain spam. Frankly, people are used to having GoAnimate submissions suck, so they're likely to vote before investigating very far. Replacing the robo-voices with real ones helps tremendously, but try not to have the same person do too many voices in the same episode. The stories and comedy are good. Keep at it and eventually, people will catch on and scores will improve.
Thanks heaps! This gave me a smile and a chuckle, and I appreciate the time you took to watch and review! As for the voices, yeah it's all me, everything. I have some guest stars coming up though, and plan on a full-cast of newly voiced characters as the show evolves/continues.
Fernando accepts a difficult mission from a suspicious guy who buys him some yoghurt.
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