So this here was a nice story and there was lots of depth in the story so props to you on that aspect of things the animation is where you could have improvments make it so it flows much better and more of it needed anyways nice job
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Improve on the animation
What the video lacked in animation quality (I mean it wasn't exactly top notch 1337 pr0 work but it wasn't anywhere near the bottom either.) it made up for in the plot twists.
The story of it was EXTREMELY well thought out and since you have the great mind to come up with great stories like this, now you just have to get better with your animation. Which means Practice, Practice, Practice. So keep the great animations coming!
You're a diamond in the rough mate.
Well that was random. XD No such thing as free ice cream huh...