You did an amazing job. My only advice would be to always have movement with in 10 secants. It could be an eye movement or slight head movement or even a glimmer or blink of the eye is enough to make it feel like you are not just looking at a still image. Never image block a full dialogue. If you do not feel like animating the mouth you can pretty much get away with not doing so for about half way through. At some point you need to show the person who is speaking the words, More so if we are still being introduced to the characters and what they sound like. Another trick would be showing part of the body of the person who is speaking moving as they speak. Anime is the master of lazy animating and thats not a bad thing. It simply means you can tell a story with little animation needed. Just remember that movement keeps it alive. The movement can also be but not limited to. Grass blowing in the wind, Things in the background moving or flickering, lights turning on and so on. I think the best anime to really harness this technique is DOT HACK SIGN. Id recommend watching it. Now with that crap out of the way lol, I can tell tons of hard work went into this, The voice acting is nice and I enjoyed the camera work. Epic stuff!
thrown in the middle of the story with no setup or build up into the main plot around you and no main character established off the bat to connect with as the plot along, yep that's mainly why I was confused and gave up listening 10min into it. I'm certain that this will turn out fruitful however I felt like I was watching a music video but without the tunes to accompany the action. The intro music was authentic and a nice touch but the intro itself didn't do anymore than show off a few nameless characters and try to hook you with a catchy song. Also the song ended way to abruptly. fade to silence is never an easy transition when the music beat has your attention. it left me feeling half fulfilled. Overall the project shows promise. please continue to improve.
Yeah, you're right. Then again, this anime is meant to be very different then others. There's also the fact that I took a " keep them guessing approach " and it seems to be working as most viewers seem confused at what the plot is and who the characters are. As for the song cutting short, I was running out of patience in a way. I'm glad you see promise in the overall project, though! I'll make sure it improves!
But It needed to be polished, some parts of the animation and audio are not so good.
The rest is one of the better jobs viewed in NG!, 4.5/5 and fav guy!!!
To be honest, it's a mixed bag. The animation was overall great. The fluidity of it is a little lacking. Some of the choppiness and camera shaking took away the continuity of the fight scenes and scrolling scenes a bit for me. It took away from what otherwise would have been a stunningly beautiful animation. Overall, it was still impressive and definitely the highlight.
The voice acting was ok. However, it lacked emotion and feeling. And some of the phrasing didn't really fit that well. I also felt like the sound quality felt a bit low. I don't know if that is just a limitation of your equipment or the equipment of certain VAs or what but it took away from it. (It isn't on my end. I have good headphones.) Overall, it was decent. But it was very easy to tell it was done by amateurs. I think clarity, emotion, and phrasing should be your focuses there.
As far as the plot goes, I feel like you are trying to convey a story. But it is really scattered. Some of the details were difficult to pick up. What I got from the video was basically...
1. Blue haired leader guy philosophically watches explosion.
2. Blue Haired leader sends protagonist girl and elf jerk to lead armies to investigate.
3. They find protagonist guy unconscious at investigation site.
4. Elf jerk fights protagonist girl because he is a jerk.
5. Protagonist guy wakes up and kicks elf jerks face in for being a jerk.
6. Big bad from protagonist guy's past shows up out of nowhere and proceeds to simultaneously monologue in monotone and destroy protagonist guy. Also, protagonist guy has plot conven- Umm... I mean he has amnesia.
7. Big bad leaves for some reason, even though he could clearly finish kicking everyone's @ss if he wanted to.
8. Protagonist guy wakes up in protagonist girl's home as cliche main couple subplot starts up.
I hate to be that guy when you clearly worked very hard at this. But I really didn't like the plot. It was kind of hard to gather what was going on at times. What I gathered from it was cliche and done in mostly an uninteresting way. The fight scenes were mostly cool. But the plot really felt more like an excuse to have fight scenes and, in my opinion, uninspired dialogue. I didn't like the way a lot of the characters were introduced. Clearly you have more planned for these characters and backstories and so on. But the characters felt mostly flat in this one. Most of them lack personality. And the ones that did have personality lacked the deliverance to back it up.
I also felt like I was missing details chaining these events together while watching it. I don't know if it is because I was missing key dialogue, or misunderstanding phrasing, or even not quite seeing everything due to the lack of fluidity in your otherwise great quality animation. My point is I found I had to focus much harder than normal to not miss details. In other words, it was a strain to watch this.
I give it a solid 4/5 or 8/10 due to the animation and this being your first. The animation was overall great despite some choppiness. The voice acting was decent, but felt uninspired and somewhat unclear at spots. And the plot was cliche and shaky.
Believe me, I understand how difficult creating a video like this can be. It is impressive that you could do something like this pretty much on your own. And introductions are often even harder. I can tell you right now that I don't have close to your level of animation talent. But this lacks polish as a whole. And some of that is understandable due to this being your first one. But if you are looking to improve going forward, you need to have a cleaner presentation and better storytelling.
But I think that they should blink a little more, watching them not blinking for long periods of time is kinda creepy.