You know what, I actually thought this was pretty good. I really liked the artstyle - something about it reminds me of the early 2000s. But the thing I'm torn about it the voice acting. I really liked the improv, but at times it becomes overbearing when characters talk over each other.
Overall, I'd say keep at it. I think you got something here!
Thanks Jack! i did the talking over thing for effect but next i will make sure you can hear it, thanks for the feedback! :)