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The Adventure Satchel - Pilot - Part 1

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Max, an intrepid Australian Adventurer, travels to London, United Kingdom, to meet his old friend: Professor Archimedes LaFoot - who is working with a strange, ancient stone tablet...

*NB: I decided to split the pilot episode into two parts so I could release it a little quicker.

PILOT - PART TWO: http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/683731

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The sound effects are jarring, imparticularly when the wax melted and revealed the coin. Otherwise it's a finely made animation and well written, the voice acting was a bit weird when you tried a different voice though, but not that bad. I'll be sure to check out part two.

JRRun responds:

Cheers DoctNik!
Thanks for the honest critique!

Well written, beautiful illustrations, not quite my cup of tea, but well done.

JRRun responds:

Thanks for the review! Cheers!

nice one

JRRun responds:

Thank you for the review!

You have a story that works well on its own without pictures. And then you have drawings that are capable of telling a story on their own. But by putting them together you make it worse.
E.g. the narration tells about the candle that the viewer has been seeing for several seconds. This adds redundancy and makes it more boring.

Trust your drawings to tell the story as far as possible and only narrate what they don't show.

JRRun responds:

Cheers Rotten-Carrot - that's some really helpful feedback!
I agree that it's definitely "over-narrated" in some areas. I'm hoping to find the ideal 'balance', but it may take some time. Thanks again for the critique!