Well, a few things.

1. The pause was kinda long, and so yeah, was kinda annoying.

2. The volume differences! The first part was quiet, so I turned up my volume, which I seldom do. Why? Cuz if I can hear other submissions fine at my normal volume level, I should be able to hear yours at that same level. But anyway, then the second part hit, and then it was WAY LOUD! So yeah, try for better volume control and leveling.

3. The animation in the first part was good. The animation in the second part was more pic to pic than frame to frame; ie; it was less animation and more still image than is desirable.

4. While you didn't say 'youtube' over and over, I can assume that this is an ad for your youtube channel. This doesn't sit well, because of one simple thing that, surprisingly, gets overlooked quite often the fresh from youtube crowd, and that is:

You're on Newgrounds, bro, not youtube. It's ok to post to both, and I recommend that. But an ad for your youtube channel on Newgrounds is like sitting in McDonald's with your friends and saying, "hey, let's go to Burger King; I'm hungry!" Why would you go somewhere else to eat when you can eat right here, right now?

Why would we go to youtube and support you there, when we have a rather nice little place right here, and we're already here, so why leave? Understand?

Yes, please post your animations here. This is Newgrounds, and that's what we do here. And,if you want, you could also post them on whatever that other tube thingie is too.

Welcome to Newgrounds, Randomatedboy. :)