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The Cool Kids On The Rock - Emos

rated 2.52 / 5 stars
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Comedy - Original

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May 6, 2016 | 3:26 PM EDT

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Author Comments

I made this short animation with my friends, It will probably get blammed but I wanted to give it a shot. Please give any criticism, it would be appreciated (and yes i'm aware of the cringey voice acting, please forgive me haha) :P
BTW i'm FionnDoesToons on youtube, i had no intention of uploading this to newgrounds at first and my newgrounds name was created a long time ago which is why they are different :/ I'll be sure to write in the credits in brackets 'superjockey64' next time incase somebody gets confused.



Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Before I write this review, I would like to say that I am not an animator and have absolutely no idea how long this took to make. I just have spent a long time observing what is good in content and what is not as definite. I'm sorry that I sound extremely hypocritical writing this review, I just want to see you grow as an artist on NG. You know, clean the portal up for good content. I do realize that this is your first submission on NG, but there are a few things that still need to be cleared up:

Plot- An animation should have a clear and definite point to it. This "point" is in the theme. Themes are portrayed through the cycle of an exposition, conflict and conclusion. There are many sub categories under this, but most animations flow with this pattern. The exposition should come gradually, and shouldn't be smudged within 4 lines of dialogue. There wasn't an apparent conflict that had any emotional meaning. There wasn't enough for the viewer to have any emotional feeling for the characters. The conflict did come very soon. In my opinion, I feel like there wasn't a satisfying conclusion.

Voice acting- You did say that the voice acting was sub par, but I didn't exactly hear what was being said. I'm sure this is due to the microphones you have to use in thee first place, but adding an extreme amount of diction may have patched up a few problems.

Backgrounds- This was actually not too bad. I do enjoy it when people put "Easter Eggs" inside the background, like the scene when the emo goes to the secret lair. The backgrounds were very well thought with the color scheme. Well done in this area!

For a first animation, it is generally ok to put out content like this. I would just like to point out a few areas that could use some work.

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SuperJockey64 responds:

Thanks alot for the review, yeah, the plot was pretty smudged and badly paced, I hope to make this better in later animations. I have reasonably good Blue Snowball microphone, but It didn't work at the time this was made (1 month ago, uploaded to to newgrounds only now) but again, thanks for the review :)