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StarCrossed Ep.1

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Apr 5, 2016 | 5:01 PM EDT

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First day in a new place.

This is the pilot for a series I have in mind, called "StarCrossed". I welcome critique that will help me improve, though keep in mind this is my first project of this length. If it is well enough received, I would much like to continue it. Thanks for taking the time to watch.

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Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Interesting crossover of all those CN classics.
Can't wait to check out the next episode!!!!!!!!!!


Rated 3 / 5 stars

I like the basis you have for the characters so far. The story had a good start. The animation is a bit rough, but it's decent enough.

The dialogue was a bit fast. I'm a pretty quick reader, but even I felt a bit rushed. Although I was able to get it on one play through, it did take away a bit from me focusing on the animation itself while I focused on the text. So you may want to slow that down. I think voice acting would add a lot to this, but I know it isn't always easy to get that. Either way, I think more sound in general could have been a bit better. The music was good when it played. However, some soundtrack mixed in, like in the bus chase scene, would have helped. It was too silent in general. I mean the silence worked well at spots, particularly the beginning. But I feel like a more fleshed out soundtrack would have added a lot to this.

I do feel like you have potential, though. You just need to keep at it.


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

amazing, the only problem i have was the speed of the text it is too fast for people to read but it is a great toon, keep them coming .

TheDarkman responds:

Thanks. I'll be sure to try and pace better next time.


Rated 3 / 5 stars

The story is fine, the characters themselves are well thought out and made for a pilot episode, and the actual animation and drawings are nice too. The only thing I would tell you is to work on your backgrounds, try using the pencil tool on inking mode instead of just a straight, computerized clean line, some shading on the backgrounds would help too.

TheDarkman responds:

Thanks for the feedback.