story?
no offense but i really dont think anyone is interested in a story
Author Comments
The third book of Owl concludes the story of our unlikely hero, Owl, and his mythical journey.
Nice Story
This was a good story book flash. There need to be more books of this caliber on newgrounds.
I LOVE THIS
You are very talented. I have seen everythin you have posted on newgrounds. and i am very impressed, GET YOUR WORK PUBLISHED. Make a book and you'll Make it big.
TRUST ME ;) its mi job
Virgilcomic responds:
:)
Great work. A little flawed, but great nontheless
The story of owl and the balance of the work is a remarkable piece or work. This is one of the greatest short stories I have ever read, and while I'm only 16, I have read quite a bit. Oz, you once again capture your readers and create a bond with them and the characters of the story. This being said, the reason I gave the Owl series an 8, is because there were some parts of the story which were in no way related to the overall plot, such as when Owl travels far across the desert to retrieve a leaf for lady owl, and she dies anyway. To save 8 pages or so, why not just have her die more quickly from the poison. This would keep the story progress more quickly and help keep the reader interested.
I'm not a great writer as you are, but I hope you will consider my suggestions, and I look forward to reading more of you work.
Virgilcomic responds:
Thanks for the support and criticism. I am always trying to make my writing better. Persuit of perfection can be maddening, though. :-p
He's done it again.
Owl Three is a great story, much as I have come to expect from the author. It's refreshing to see a gem amongst the tripe that sometimes seems to engulf Newgrounds, with all the 'Clock', 'Anti-Clock', and 'Anti-Anti-Clock' that goes around, as well as the 'My Stick Figures are better than your Stick Figures'. Oz Thomas makes no attempt at appeasing the general audience, but carves out his own niche with surprising effectiveness. I must admit, Owl Three was not as engrossing as Owl One, but it was a good story--although it's hard to believe it's over so soon. =) If you're looking for things you'd typically find on Newgrounds, this isn't it. But if you're looking for a diamond in the rough (and it doesn't get much rougher than Newgrounds... =D), then you will be pleasantly surprised by this submission.