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its a really nicely done+a nicely animated flash movie, but it needs to have a preloader (or a play/replay button), because an animation that loops or starts at odd times can be taken (sometimes) in a wrong way.
other than that, the human drawings were nice and in an anime style, the dancing blood-cells and the blood cells/systems analysis was good, while the rest of the project's contents were nicely drawn, and presented in a cool way.
in some parts it felt kinda rushed, and the human figures were not included alot in the movie, while in some parts the words flew out of the screen too quickly to be read completely, however those are minor mistakes, and in general, you dod a good science project flash movie.
you have skills.
its a nice film.
Do you know how to make that? I can't figure it out with the new flash. >A<
Ah thanks :D
My mom gave the same comments about speed and mistakes, but I had less than 24 hours to wrap up and squeeze in real sleep in there. So it was all kind of ignored and I went "Hopefully The teacher is wowed enough that she doesn't comment on that" XD
Thankyou a lot for the critique~
As an educational video, it wasn't that informative. Simply listing the different parts of cells and their processes without explaining them leads to general confusion.
As for the animation, abusing shape tweening makes the animation look like one from the early 2000s. The backgrounds and slides weren't put together well, as white on the boarders and some slides being smaller than others is a bit of an eyesore.
As for the subject, Newgrounds isn't really the place for this kind of stuff. If you want to post something educational or experimental, it should be something innovative and creative like "Scale of the Universe" or in a lighter case "Doodle God".
With a little more practice in Flash and its fundamentals, you'll get the hang of structuring your videos more properly. As of now, this is amateur video structure, and I hope to see you improve in the future.
This was for my anatomy class, and we were going over the cell structure. Not a bad animation that was created in less than a week, aye? :D
The details of the project weren't supposed to be at all informative to the audience. It was supposed to be a way to get the students to crack open the textbook and remember something from biology. Which for me was almost nothing. o3o woops.
Ah, yup, tweening, my favorite past time from 2005. That's roughly when I was taught animation. Particularly Flash. I don't use it in today's work, but given the dead line- I had to make something to get a grade.
The boarder issue is mostly due to my goof when creating the initial animation. I started making it in, I think, Html 5 canvas. Then realized why I was so lost. Moved to creating it in Action Script 3.0, where I was originally taught flash, and then ran into the issue that I didn't know any of the new coding for flash. Haha, good times for short deadlines.
Overall, I got a 95 on it, and that is satisfactory for me :D
I don't know if I'll post future animations, partly due to all previous attempts at flash going ignored and getting pulled down by newgrounds, This was posted here for class because I learned that my teacher's computer couldn't play it.
And even then it still technically didn't play and I had to quick upload it to deviantart. :P
Overall, if I post anything in the future- Random remixed music that I made wouldn't be used, and Tweening would be abandoned once again.
Thank-you for the structured critique though!
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