I am going to dock points for this not being animated... HOWEVER... As you have already stated your intention toward a graphic novel, I will resist the intent to throw away points...
Might I suggest, however, that you post something of animation (even of terrible quality) and receive a little less "crap" about it...
It can be just the "animatik" as my animator-boss calls it, all choppy and whatever...

Okay, to be frank, this isn't bad. I honestly think some of the others around here missed the point that you were going "graphic novel" with it. Personally, and quite frankly, I think you have a lot going for you here... It's likely to come across with a "Tarantino" affection, but it certainly has potential... Rock on, and just try a "comic book panel" style for your next posting... That will let the rest of us know that you're serious about the art side of composing this thing, and you can get a few frames ahead in animation... Savvy?

This is a page for flash animations, not movies. This sort of stuff belongs somewhere else.

You didn't pay any attention to what they do here, did you? They don't do real videos here. Everything is animation on this site. You might want to pay a bit more attention to things before you jump in. Expect a poor score and maybe a removal or blam. Do you have anything animated to submit?