Yonder Ho! Episode 10 - The Apawcalypse - Part III
Jenemazzi, a girl who despises cats, is now their only hope. Stuff will happen!!
I feel like this is far too long 37 minutes is way to long for something online to make them better make them shorter like five minutes or 9 minutes. I also find the audio to be pretty bad everyone who talks seems to be to close to the mic. I would also like to see you stick to one animation style have it mach the characters in the show.
It's too long, so...1 star. That's your review.
The audio, yeah, I'll give you that one. It could be better. A valid complaint : )
Animation style? I'm afraid you've completely lost me there, Mr. Fish. You didn't explain anything. "...match the characters"? What did you mean? No clue...
I don't mean to be bitter, I'm not mad or anything, but it seems like you didn't even watch it to be honest. You didn't say anything at all about the story, or the characterS, the music, the art, or even a single part of the cartoon you reviewed! A lot of work went into this believe it or not. If you're gonna review something, at least put some thought into it, silly. At least watch it all the way through, man.
I give your review 1 star because too long and writing style didn't match avatar (⌒‿⌒)
The video begins with a thunder-cats PSA about the dangers of alcohol.
The public service announcement was pretty funny in a very unintentional manner.
Your audio distortion effects for that skit were weird.
The beginning skit and some of the video footage could potentially get you into trouble for copyright reasons.
The actual video itself has plenty of animation without any need for filler.
A lot of these skirts take a lot of focus away from the overall story.
I would try producing an episode without those fake commercial bumpers.
I do like those mario paint commercial bumpers and a few of the animated skits are entertaining too.
I like a few of the backgrounds used for the Yonder Ho episode.
The character of Mint is beginning to develop more as a character.
I like how you explored, Jenemazzi's past experience of being bitten by a cat as a small child.
It's not really needed to explain why Jenemazzi hates cats.
I've known plenty of people that hate cats without an actual explanation.
I like Jenemazzi's nickname.
Perhaps, Pete's nickname for his sister could catch on.
I've sometimes gave other people nicknames and eventually other people use the nickname too.
The story still has plenty of room to explore more of mint's personality.
One of the major characters has died.
The next episode could explore the impact of this character's death.
What has changed and how does it impact your characters?
You can use that character's death to take the show into new directions.
The robots used during the battle could perhaps make a come back.
Are these robots sentient or cold machines?
Do the robots talk?
You could treat these robots like brand new characters.
This movie had a ridiculous number of characters without extra time for revealing information about each character.
The main protagonists are; Pete, Jenemazzi and The Fox.
The other secondary characters also place a major impact onto the plot.
The actions of the characters including the bit players seemed to have impact on the storyline.
I hope these future episodes continue to pickup from where the last episode left off.
I prefer the serialization style of presenting Yonder Ho episodes.
The show really picked up during the cat episodes.
If you return to using stand alone episodes be sure to keep a consistent continuity.
Each episode should impact the next even if the changes maybe small.
Sorry, I didn't write my review in a more timely manner.
I just had to think of new criticism without repeating stuff said in pervious reviews.
I hope to have succeeded.
- Mightydein
Forgive me, but I have a lot to say...
I thought the ThunderCats bit was pretty funny. "Obey the code! Don't drink Alcohooool." The distorted audio is from it being recorded with a VCR. I spliced in footage of Dragon Ball Z when planet Namek exploded. People will watch it and think "Why did Lion-O destroy the world?"
I'm not concerned with copyright infringement. I know how to get around it so sites can't detect anything. I'm not sure if Newgrounds does anything like this, but YouTube will auto-detect copyrighted video and audio and they can outright ban you from the site. They're super strict and you can easily get in trouble if you don't know what you're doing. For songs, I change the pitch very slightly so YouTube can't detect it, and for video, I change the cropping and add odd filters. Nothing to be proud of, but I don't think it really matters all that much since there're so few people who watch the show. If the show was more popular, I'd probably be more careful.
Maybe all the skits and fake commercial take some focus away from the story, but I think they add a certain uniqueness to the show. I find randomness to be very funny, and you never know what to expect from the "commercial" breaks. I usually agree with you 100% on things, but I'm afraid the break segments are here to stay. And I'm glad you do enjoy the Mario Paint bumpers. Those are definitely here to stay!
I'm happy someone likes the backgrounds! Believe it or not, I sometimes spend hours working on them. It's a good time to listen to audiobooks.
I'm also glad you liked Mint's character. You don't see a lot of amputees in cartoons. She's gonna be in more episodes. But yeah, I'm glad you liked Mint. I was afraid how people would react to a little girl missing an arm. I think she's an interesting character. She's missing an arm, but she never lets it slow her down, and she still manages to knit. I don't know if you've ever tried to knit, but it's not easy. The fact that she does it with one hand is impressive. I actually did research to find out if it would even be possible. Anyway, really glad people are liking Mint's character. I would like to explore her a little more....Gee, that didn't come out right.
I thought it would be interesting to explore Jenemazzi's past. She hated cats because she was afraid of them. None of that was even in the script to be honest. And about her nickname, maybe it should catch on.
I've actually become super attached to the robots. I've been working on a short story about them. I might try to make a web comic. They are definitely sentient robots with colorful personalities. And yes, they do talk! They're definitely gonna make a come back someday. I might share the story about them in a forum when it's done. They're a group of mercenary robots who are occasionally the bad guys. Kinda different I think.
My goodness there are indeed a lot of characters. Most of them aren't even mentioned in the script. In fact, pretty much all of the cat's actions are completely unscripted. Having so many cats on screen made it difficult to animate. Mostly because my computer is ancient.
I'm very happy you like the characters for the most part. It means a lot. Having so many, it can be hard to explore each one though.
The next episode will be connected to previous episodes, but tell a completely new story. The show was suppose to be about Pete looking for his parents, but it doesn't really focus on that too much.
I liked that you called them "the cat episodes." That pretty much sums them up. I'm very glad you like them of course! They were by far the most difficult to make. The last three episodes took 6 months to complete. The first episode was made in 5 days. That's partly because I'm going to school now and I don't have as much time as I'd like to work on stuff. I'll admit, the show was pretty sub-par in the beginning, but I think it's getting better. It's become its own thing over time.
After making 10 episodes, I've learned quite a bit. I've made a lot of mistakes, and that's a good thing! I welcome criticism as long as it's thoughtful. I take notes and try to do better next time. I've still got a lot to learn, I've only been making cartoons, and drawing in general, for about 4 years now. I really appreciate you taking the time to write these reviews. They've been very helpful. Making cartoons is sorta what I'd like to do for a living.
Yes, I will make sure to keep a consistent continuity, but I'd also like to make a show that anyone can jump into and not be totally lost.
The last three episodes has had a huge impact on the show's world. Every cat in the world is giant and has pink eyes now (with a few exceptions.)
This is getting pretty long, so I'll wrap things up now. Thank you for watching all 10 episodes and reviewing each one. You're reviews are always well written and thoughtful. I hope you liked the reference I made to you in the last episode.
You are cool : )