I remade this lol
My friend @Colter111 and I wanted to make a short so here you go!
I remade this lol
lol this is funny
I noticed some uncolored areas and gaps on the pine apple character.
Take extra time into searching for uncolored areas and fill them in.
Most animation programs have a zoom-in and zoom-out feature.
Use different shades of white for eyes, teeth and other things.
Two objects can be the same color but in different shades of color.
Play around with your colors more often.
Your characters could use some more lively poses even just for a conversation.
Real people often move their hands during conversation to hold your attention.
If you are uninterested in the topic of conversation; The person talking to you becomes increasingly animated.
Your talking characters need to display more body language and facial expression during conversation.
The two characters only moved their lips during conversation.
Body language is a missing element in the conversation between your two characters.
Try to imagine watching your cartoon without sound.
Would it still be entertainment without the added element of sound?
Sound added a lot to your cartoon.
The audio was very humorous and some of the sight gags were very silly.
That pineapple character looks silly.
You are on the right-track by using sight gags and playing around with the camera.
You just need to play around with the body language of your characters more often.
- Mightydein
Thanks for the suggestions, but we did make this in about 1 hour XD
I'm currently working on a new episode of Stretchyman (my main cartoon) and I've been working on it for about a month and a half now XD
Thanks!
-Charlie
IS A KID? NOTHING FUNNY BUT IS GREAT THE ANIMATION 3/5