Definitely needs audio... Even REALLY bad audio is better than nothing. And I'm not even going to comment on length...
The animation was fluid, so as you work, you will only gain. Try slowing down a bit, and add a few (okay, you don't need all the "bells and whistles" of animation to 'sell the shot'... You will need something!
I'm a 'regular' at Stickpage.com, so don't think I'm just coming down hard on you. I'm just trying to be constructive on what you can do to be "better" the next time out.
From here... do you want more? ::
Try developing some of your OWN style to the 'stick thing'... Check out "Stickman Can't Fight" series, and you can see some artistic influence to the stick genre...
Take a little of your own 'attitude' into the genre. Just 'cause stick's only acted a certain way before, it doesn't mean they can't act your way now. AND finally, don't keep thinking in terms of "..and then... this happens... and then..."
Start working into the thinking of "because of this happening... then that happens..."
Finally, breathe and relax... Developing a storyboard will help. It helps break a project into manageable bits, and as you complete each one you can '...check it off...' In the meantime, you can reflect on what you wanted to say (vs...) what you wanted to say.
None the less, it was really cool! Keep your nose in the wind, and your tail to yourself,
Douglas G+10
Author Comments
This flash animation was meant to be way more short but i made longer, also i know that there's people at NG that doesn't like stick fights, if you are that one, please get out and don't hate if you don't like this type of content.
Made in 2 days.
It was way too short, I love stick fights! But this animation was too short
you did a good job on the animation! But you lack thinks like background and music.
I like stick fights, but this one could have used some work. Where are the sound effects? Hoping it's just my sound card or flash malfunctioning. Also, where's the music? The Audio Portal has plenty you could use.