I like games like this but you have very little influence on the story. You go visit Dabian and instantly your character either complains or complains.
Author Comments
This interactive story is about Richard. Well, what is there to say? Richard is a man who - unlike many others - wants to understand this world a bit more. This story is a heart-felt, pumped up story about a man on his own personal pilgrimage to seek inner peace, not without his own small conflicts along the way.
some are seeking peace others have a lot of unfinished business to do.
It's a nice concept, with a (very) clear message about finding traction in life.
In this single chapter I only had the option of getting to know one of the two friends. Though I did give it a second play through to get to know them both.
In my honest opinion I don't know where you can go with this, so I would just elaborate and expand on this chapter; having Richard be able to interact with other citizens of the city and displaying the same message through the dialogue.
Other than that there were some grammar issues, but, overall, I enjoyed your work!
brutalexcess responds:
I did identify grammar issues through my second proofing! And thank you for pointing it out, regardless. Also, thank you for your suggestions, and certainly sounds like a good idea! Maybe I will try to add some kind of exploration feature in the city?
-brutalexcess
The current state of this game isn't anything special, but I see a lot of potential; you certainly have an ability to write.
I liked this, very deep and well constructed.
Maybe offers other s a glimmer of hope, but it did speak to me.
I definitely hope you can write more and expand on this.
Thanks author.
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