A great fakeout!
A great fakeout!
Oh gods you had me sitting on the edge of my chair with that ending!!
Really witty; and creative. The ending was awesome!
Been enjoying these. That last line cracked me up especially, unexpected yet fitting!
Also like the inclusion of Blanch. Might be trying to emulate the hard boiled lone detective, but it's nice to see the narrator some interaction with an ongoing regular character.
Very well polished, I thought the script was brilliant and original. This quality of material could be aired in front of an international audience, like in a film festival.
If you made something of equal quality, but more of a drama or something people take seriously, then your audience will take you more seriously. I say this because a comedy short is what is abundant at Newgrounds, although you do stand out. What I'd like to see is a more sophisticated comedy style, less cliched jokes, and more story development, maybe think first who the characters are and how they develop.
What I see here is the seed of a professional, doing professional level work. Lots of things could be changed about this, but overall it's very very good, mainly because of the quality: great sound and graphics, but the story is too close to dexter or another film noir. So the lesson here is to start with something original, make original jokes, don't be afraid to get out onto that branch. Don't emulate the competition, just be the competition. Overall the film felt immature, because of the groaner jokes, it could have deviated from the archetype of noir films a little more. Again, awesome work! Love it!