Very enjoyable and I can't wait for the next one to come out! I can see a vast improvement from the first episode to this one. In regards to the length, I don't have a problem with how short it is since this is an ongoing series. If it was a one and done deal then yeah, it should be longer. But I liked the length of this one. Even though we haven't seen much of him, Haruki Taiki is my favorite character so far.
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!- This is the 1st ep for part 2 -!
kurumi matsuokais living alone her father ran away and left a debt one day some one gets inside her apartment and attacking her and then carl black a young detective saves her...
shokomomi responds:
thank you (\\T^T\\)/♥♥♥
I do admit, this may be a bit too short for my tastes, but, you did try with this and it seemed like it was pretty cool and it was a pretty good game for the amount of effort you put into it.. The title is what got me, really. Well, if you ever do make another pert of this, or another story, it'd be best to add some action, make it longer, more interesting, improve the grammar, stuff like that.
shokomomi responds:
ok i will thank you (\\^-^\\)♥
Fantastic! I've been waiting for this! Again, I understand why it's so short, its a chapter of a bigger piece and you are doing so well! Keep up the great work!
shokomomi responds:
thank you (\\\T^T\\\)♥♥♥
This?
A game?
No.
No,no,NO!!!
This is not a game.
I don't even know what it is!
....
just....
THE FUCK????
shokomomi responds:
sorry T^T
Oh my god this is terrible. This is too short for this to even be called a novel.
shokomomi responds:
T^T