This is really cool! You've done a good job of mimicking the HS style, but the slight variations make it fresh. I felt the beginning lacked a bit of flow (though I am sure it would be smoother if I had read the rest of the adventure!) and the music didn't quite hit the mark for me. It sounded more like background noise than being in sync with the visuals. That said, it does have potential to grow and become more solid. Keep it up! Hope to see you reach to even greater heights :)
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A flash for my fanadventure, here's a link for it http://mspfanventures.com /?s=1566.
It was my first experience in animating and writing music, so pardon me for any flaws.
ok for those that don't know what this is READ THIS TO KNOW WTF THIS IS!!!
this is fan made animation from a very popular web comic created by Andrew Hussie called Homestuck, found on mspaintadventures.com or just google it... be warned you will be sucked into it just to figure out WTH it is and next thing you know a few months and +7000 pages later you will become a very avid fan... i ain't gonna spoil it for you, just go... and enjoy the story...
now for the flash, while staying true to the art style of the series you did pretty well. the sound didn't seem to fit right though. personally, i would've used sburban jungle from the "fourth album of the series" or frost from "heir transparent" or terezi owns from "at the price of oblivion." good luck on the future endevors if you are going to proceed on making animations of this nature.
That was...a trip. I like your style when it comes to drawing, and I think with a little work on movement (giving your animations a more lively or animated feel) you'll make A-grade stuff. I wasn't really turned by what was happening per se, but I kinda got a feel for what was going on. I wouldn't quite call it a plot, but *something* was happening, and that's better than a lot of stuff on newgrounds. At least it was nice looking =D
The music didn't really do much for me on the other hand. It was frantic and really set the the pace of this piece well, but as far as creating an interesting soundscape or enhancing the emotion of what was going on, it fell kinda flat. I understand you're a beginner, so no worries. You'll improve, just keep practicing. The music at the end of it was good: quiet, understated, dreamy, so points for that.
Overall for your first try, this is not something to be ashamed of.
I like the style and music that goes with this, but
eh hehe, i have no idea whats going on in this. ;D
s-opal responds:
That's because it's a part of a comic - you need to now the whole story to understand ;) But thank you anyway!