THE END NO MAKE SENSE AND I DONT HER TO GOOD THE VOICE

Kind of nice flash, I noticed that the artowrk could use some more detail, subtitles if you may, and last but not least, a better microphone.
Nice try though, should redo and better results should come your way!

the beginning was nice, but near the end i got lost.... at one part it looked as if her breast was out with very pink nipples... idk, maybe a tad but more work on the artwork.. and get your self a better mic... and redo it, i'm sure it will be alright... maybe you should make it a bit longer as well... it was kinda short..

Not bad, It feels under developed but not bad. I can solemnly agree with your creator comment about the audio, that was the biggest issue. Visual and style wise it felt very lacking and very dry. Otherwise though your concept and idea for the story is a bit two-sided. On one side it can fit very well for a comedy, on the other it might of been a little horror piece. Eitherway though you were decent my friend. I'm going to give you a 1 in a half out of 5. And a 1/5 in voting power. Keep practicing, creating and contributing on here. I hope you've enjoyed this review. Good day.

pretty good.....i liked it!!