The Monster

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Due to my poor writing skills, any spelling or grammatical corrections/critiques are welcome.
This is a "Character Story", which is a prequel and character side stories that will not be shown in my series/story "The Other Side".

This is the Monster's "Character Story", who is inspired by Naruto.

Music: Nier OST by Keiichi Okabe
Check out the rest of the characters: http://youtu.be/8OUZoGdh5Nc


i love your drawings though the reading was kinda maked me want to watch something else, but im glad i didnt. I do love the story line. the action part didnt really look "flowy" kinda looked like they had sticks in their arms, but hey! you draw better than me ^^ great job

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exninja123 responds:

Hehe thanks! xD
yeah, I still need practice on anatomy :P

This is an awesome story so far! This should at least be 4 stars. People need to realize this is not a full on animated anime with color and effects. This is good for what it is. You should really get some more pictures though. What would be cool is if you put the words in a box below or above the scene so we are not seeing a black screen and just words. You want the viewer to see your awesome art skills not words on a black background. So my suggestion would be have words in a word box on the scene it's playing in. And if possible have mouths moving so we know who exactly is talking but that was just a random tidbit I could come up with. And grammar could be fixed up a bit. Just run through the scenes and read in your head does this sentence sound right. Easy fixes. Almost perfect :)
I loved the story plot though keep up the great work will be looking forward to what you have next. Have a nice day everyone.

You have been hunted :3

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exninja123 responds:

Thank you very much!
Glad your enjoyed it! :)

This was a very captivating story, and the music just added to the emotions of each part of it, I really enjoyed it and I hope to see more.

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exninja123 responds:

thank you! :D

Such a wonderful little story, can't wait to see what happens next.

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exninja123 responds:

thanks! :)

More animation and less words. Need to find a better way to unfold the story- the flow is far too slow to keep ones attention and the scenes of any art/rudimentary animation are few and far between.

exninja123 responds:

thanks for the review! :)

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3.75 / 5.00

Jun 27, 2012
4:50 PM EDT
  • Daily 3rd Place June 29, 2012