Dude so far I have been reading your story line and you really need to work on errors.
So far there are 5 errors.
1.Grammar: you really need to work on spacing and Capital letters and spelling ok?
2. Art: You need to try and make the edited characters look the same as Goku or something. You did great with Goku though.
3. Background: Try to create your own. Keep trying. Put effort.
4. Commenting: Sorry man. Try NOT to br rude and try to be nice. Ok?
5. Effort: Put what you try to make it Perfected.
Try not to displace the blames you make with criticisms otherwise you get or mistakes you make. Learn well.
Be focused on your work, and skip it if you make ANY errors.'
One day you could be pretty good at this kind of stuff. Keep on experimenting and exploring for different techniques within whatever program you used for this and use the best stuff for you.
I gotta say this is a beginning that is much better then the beginning of a whole lot of the other spriters out there.
Also; that 3D work is exceptional.
Storywise; You've got your good guys, bad guys, and conflict, just like all tales. However, the plot seemed kind of... unpolished. As a pilot episode, it should be the "planting of the seed". But seeing all these characters from so many places already interacting and doing stuff like they know each other, the viewer thinks; "Did I miss something?".
You did say this was a beta though. And all good stories have drafts.
Good luck, man. Let me know when the next instalment is out.
i got stuck on the first text sence which is "ahhhh this is bullshit" which is ironic.
lol. I'm sorry. about that. all you have to do is press spacebar to continue it say's so in the display.
I thought you did try to have more of a story than some of your other work. What I didn't like was how this just seemed to go on too long. There wasn't even a single action scene! Don't get me wrong, emotional stuff it good too, but it just doesn't add up to much here. I did think the music was pretty good. I think the sprite work is alright, but it doesn't really go anywhere.
Maybe the finale with the action will make up for this. This was okay, not something I would recommend. There should have been more movement and better written text. I can see how you were influenced by SMBZ for this. Alvin-Earthworom was actually inspired by Kirbopher's TTA series.
This is going to slowly lead up to the action scenes sense it's going to be explaining origins. not much action right away. it builds up to it. trust me. episode 2 is gonna be crazy insane. and very involved.
I gotta say this was pretty hard to watch. I'll try and critique as best I can without sounding like a royal prat :<.
First and for most write a proper story. This felt like you making it up as you were going along and it made no sense. Secondly, the images in the text boxes were ugly as sin, as were most of the sprites and the font you chose. You should never use Times New Roman font :<. The characters from animes, games etc and some fan-made characters just made this non-sensicle. It's like you're trying to add as many as possible, and the outcome is just... what is this? I couldn't even finish watching.
Interms of critique, all I can say is start smaller. WAY smaller! Learn some basics about animation, get an idea of how to write a compelling story and create characters that an audience can relate too/enjoy watching. If you are going to use sprites, keep the characters in character. Vegeta saying "I made a funny" felt awkward and out of place on so many levels, or even get someone to help you with writing. On the subject of the text boxes though, if possible you should bypass that entirely and just get voice actors. Text dialogue in Flash animations is so 2002, in this day and age good VA should be standard.
I will however give you one star because you are obviously still learning, but considering that there are so many movies like this on NG, this will just get swept up as being nothing special unfortunatly. If you want to make something that will get tons of views and a good score, you'll need to practice. Make shorter animations and try new things.
I don't mean to sound like an ass, you have potential! You just need to practice. :>
one. i did not make this up as i went a long. this i actually planned out. from beginning to end. are you a sprite person or a flash person. this was in no way played by ear. i'm not in anything on this site for popularity. i'm not like the goons that gotta make stuff involving popularity for being popular. in no way none of this stuff is stolen from anything unlike every one else where every one has to use tv jokes or anything. this is a well thought out story. you guys are so used to stories ending in fights. i'm giving something different. i'm bringing something fresh and new to this site. there is nothing crooked. you guys are spoiled by fight scenes. violence on this site is highly over rated. practice? I've pretty much perfected the animation. i recolored all my sprites for this. the only dumb ass move i made was with the walking animation instead of leaving it the way it was i cut out some things so it would fit. which was stupid right now. that i admit. i'm going to be recoloring sprites. the 3d work and everything is apart of my script. stuff like this real work. real animation process always gets over looked here due to the fact that people are used to popular stuff constantly being released.