a few things:
1. The Title Card.The title card looks really lazy. i imagine you used PhotoShop or something. But it looks more like you just M.S. Paint-ed this. At least put minimal effort into a title card, instead of just chicken-starching lining with one single swipe of the pen to add color and shading.
2. The Animation. When they move they travel through hyper-space (they move really fast) to there next position instead of just easing to it slow and smoothly. Also when they move they grow and become deformed, draw a beginning, middle, and end pose, making sure they're all the same proportion, then do the in betweens. I've seen this same problem in all your movies.
3. Color And Shade (Now these aren't really that big of a deal). The color is really neon and hurts to look at, and the shade barely looks like shading, just make it a little darker. Oh (and this is a big deal), the shading proportions are really off as well. do a beginning, middle , and end position for those as well, then the in betweens.
You could make these LOOK good, just keep some rules in mind and redo / tweak stuff if you need to.
Your writing on the other hand, i find really boring and badly executed and timed. I am not a good writer by any means, but i go over things to make sure they at least make sense or entertain people enough.
BK gto distroyed once they switched to xbox. they were better for nintendo :(
This pretty much sums up how that meeting went. I miss old Rare. :( But good flash. :)
Donkey Kong was always the best, nuff said.
awesome anim. btw
...and I think it is not too late. It is better to create new Characters, than taking the old ones and throw them into a plot, that just doesn't fit! Maybe they thought it'll sell better, but it simply took away the special spirit from Banjo-Kazooie. This isn't the only case (I'm just watching the South Park Episode with Indiana Jones getting... *sigh* -_-)
It happens way too often, that some stories getting mashed up with something "new" and "fancy"