I think your style could use a lot of work, I'm talking about the first scene thats mostly hand drawn, though The part with the bridge seemed really well designed though. Not to sure what its about. If you spend more time on this it could be so much better As you have said in a previous comment about neglecting this project. There is potential here, especially with that bridge scene
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This is an animation to be used as part of my coursework for college. This is the first animation I've ever done and the class has been asked to upload their animations to newgrounds to see what comments people would make.
Decent, I like the looks of it, though there are a few things id fix.
1- The sounds should cut off a bit smother, maybe find a longer sound and lower the volume as it nears the end.
2- A few of the buildings and the water look a bit rushed, cant we do better?
And just to keep from seeming harsh, how long did you have to work on this?
DaneHill responds:
Thanks for the suggestions, I will deffinately take them into consideration while I'm improving the animation.
In terms of time passed since the task was issued, around 3-4 weeks; however, this was alongside other subjects, and unfortunately, this animation took the brunt of the neglect.
Was this inspired from Terry Prachett's character from Discworld? If so, that is pretty cool! Was there supposed to be a bigger story behind the animation, though? If there is one, I did not really see it. It might help if there was a little exposition for the video.
DaneHill responds:
Yes, the college project is to create a game using a character from the Discworld series.
There is a bigger story behind it, but the piece is unfinished (the ending title was just put in to make it seem finished and will be removed later.). Unfortunately I have not yet had time to finish the animation.
good start!
did notice that the bridge disspeared in one of the frames
most everything fits for the short amount of content
DaneHill responds:
It's stil a work in progress, and I havent had the time to put in the sound for that part, but that part was going to be lightning lol. Thanks for the input though :)
edit- sorry, my mistake, the bridge does vanish when it shouldn't, thanks for the comment :)
I'm sorry, but the lack of plot and the sloppy animation does not seem Newgrounds worthy. As much as I love Terry Pratchett, I think this should stay in the class.
DaneHill responds:
Believe me, I agree. We were pretty much forced to upload these today at my college.
edit- By the way, if we're forced to upload the finished versions of these too (which I'm pretty sure we will) then It'll probably make more sense then. The plot for the game I'm gona be doing for the college projects with this is basically The Death of Rats hunting down hourglasses which have been stolen by other rats. The next scene from this one is going the be The Death of Rats chasing a rat with an hourglass hung from its neck through the streets of ankh moarpork before cornering it in an alleyway.