The animation was trying to be fluent, i see that, but it was messy and lacking in syching (making all the parts flow together) and spacing (how much you actually spaced your frames). From what i see you need to space your frames out more but keep the same time and distance traveled. It was also dis proportioned, try keeping the same size arms, legs, body, etc throughout the whole thing and try to adding a little more detail to show what's what, and not just a round shape for a foot or tubes for arms and legs.
The writing was bad. Don't just make dick jokes and what-is-this???? humor without proper execution. don't have him say "what is this armor?" when he can clearly tell it's armor. the Ending, after the dick-faggot joke (bad), was A simple and classic set up, but a little more emphasis could have been added to the sudden realization that there was a monster. I get it's suppose to be a immature humor and there's nothing wrong with that, but it need better story, a set up to execute the jokes, and a few twists and unexpected jokes wouldn't hurt as well.
You show influences from Spazkid and Oney, that's fine I'm influence by them as well, but don't take jokes they made and put them into your cartoon with only minor tweaks, like the masturbation scene. If you are going to make a reference joke, try making your own and not just a rip off, change the angle and movement he makes and add a little more purpose for why he's doing it.
You can do better, hopefully you will. But i say you should work on your writing the most so your stuff isn't just typical Newgrounds shit that's just forgotten a week later, make it original and well executed so people will remember it.
I'm sorry, but it wasn't funny at all. Art wasn't the best, neither was the jokes, and yes, it was egoraptor much, but it failed to copy even that.
I felt i became retarded by watching this.
Could you have possibly putten any more random irrelevant "funny" faces in this?
Seriously, the constant spasm of the guys facial features ruined the whole cartoon for me.