ok a good start
One question: why is there a lens flare where there is no noticeable lens to cause it? Or are we looking through a camera? Because that's the only way you'll see one.
As for the rest, the pacing could use a little work...a little more clarity on the characters. Maybe background? Why was he there...and so on. Also the panel angles seemed a little strange. Abrupt changes.
I don't like the bars surrounding it or the fact it somehow ended in the middle, you should check by yourself that it doesn't work properly.
Needs Little work, little rough around the edges, but still pretty impressive.