This is very well done, especially since it's your first submission.
I love the dark feeling and overall grey mood of it all, being placed in the Victorian era only makes this better.
Sorry if your voice didn't come out as you expected, but it's a good narration nonetheless.
Different than what I expected
Although the narration didn't sound at its best, Seeing as to how this ended up being a creepy flash, it fit in great and amplified the chilling effect of it. And I really liked the animation; to me, it seemed to fit the theme perfectly. The way the words are spoken is also great, and add the right emotion to the flash. Overall, I'd say that this would be great if finished rather than being left as an intro, as you did a very good job with it, despite not having done flash in a long time.
PS: You say you are no animator, but I care to disagree
Very boldly done. I like the tone and pacing of this. Great job with the story as well
Is this really your very first animation??? Oo
That was great. So dark!!! I love this kind of movies! And about the audio, I think it's great! It fits perfectly with the animation. Sounds like a very old turntable.
Don't worry about the FBF style. I'm not capable of working in it myself. :'(
I'm pretty sure you will make the front page in no time if you keep it up! Good job dude!!!
Ohhhh... And by the way... Apocalyptica rules!!!!!!!!!!!!!