I love Yann Tiersen
But seriously, after watching this, I feel it deserves daily first, not second.
I love the style, it all looks very dark and evil, and the entire atmosphere is only enhanced by the voicing. In spite of the varying volume levels. It could definitely do with some refining and finetuning, but with a story like this, it's bound for greatness. Love it.
Where will we be able to see/read the rest of the story?
It's basically this story that I don't think I can tell until I get the story JUST right and can illustrate it JUST the way I want it. But I plan for a graphic novel format one day once I iron out all the wrinkles. Though I may animate random excerpts from the story as exercise. Thanks for the comment. :)
An Excellent Foray back into Flash
I think you've got a good deal of talent and that this is a great springboard for a larger story. While it is true, that it wasn't full of frame-by-frame "awesomeness" as you put it, I still think it was very well done. The flash chose a style and stuck with it. The backgrounds were good, the characters even better. If each flash needs some kind of a thematic overtone, yours definitely achieved that. The audio was a bit problematic, which is really why I took 1 point away from the score. The good news is, you seem to be aware of how to improve the audio, which is definitely half the battle. In and of itself, the "raspy" and "garbled" effects to the narration didn't bother me, in fact it partially added to the sense of unease the flash created as a whole. The issue is balancing between effectively distorted audio and something that simply cannot be understood. I think this flash danced along that line a little too closely, but again, I still enjoyed it and there were really only a couple of moments I would say the audio was "bad." As another reviewer mentioned, if you wanted to, you could amend this flash with subtitles and really improve the overall quality. If you learn from your audio experience, I think you've got a great starting point, and I look forward to seeing where you go from here. I wouldn't worry too much about your animation style, I think it works, and it will hone itself and improve as you get back into the nitty-gritty of flash.
the voice acting was fine, I blame your mic, or possibly my speakers, you could definitely speak more clearly.
animation was fine if a bit unimaginative, and frankly boring.
I have a problem with your lack of a conclusion, some say this some say that... yahdy friggin yahda. I know it's a "classic" way of telling spooky stories but it's just so overdone and dull, if possible maybe add something people watching can actually connect to, or at least something conclusive, maybe you don't have to say exactly what happened but throw in some sort of definite, other then theirs two happy princesses and maybe ones dead but I totally have no idea. just something, otherwise it's just more unfinished crap on newgrounds that could be great.
Tell you what:
Though you say you are not an animator, nor good with voice acting, you made a nice cutout animation* and the story, although not the most original, can be a base for future animations you have in mind.
So what i'm saying is: if you fell like doing another animation, go ahead, you got a lot of potential, but always try to improve at your own pace, take both the good and bad critics with open arms and I hope see another animation of you soon (no pressure).
P.S. :subtitles are also something good to compensate bad audio