Now that what i call a good flash it has great music and a awesome story i wish there were more.
Hope to see the next one.
I suppose I should start off with the parts of this I didn't particularly care for, just to get it out of the way:
There were a few confusing parts to this, and I saw a lot of places where more description would be nice (for example, what was that fire-looking thing? who was speaking to him? what were the monocle'd man's motives? etc. etc.). I know it's harder to do that in a video with very little dialogue, but it's not impossible. The art is rather simplistic and could use some work-- in more serious stories, I like a little more detail. But maybe that's just me...
Now for the parts I liked.
Despite a couple plot holes and moments of confusion, this was really good. I know from that bit up there that I wrote, it may seem like I didn't like this, but I assure you that I was just being critical; this is actually really good. The concept is great, and the design of the guardians was pretty awesome. The music was beautiful and gave the story a bit of a wild, ethereal feel, and you synced it with some of the scenes pretty nicely. It was involving and interesting and it would make a great series. I don't know if you've done other stuff with these characters or this universe, but I really, really hope you develop this story. You could do some really great things with this.
So yeah, it was good. :)
Nice little short
I enjoyed it.. I don't have the time to go look into the details as to why but I can tell you this- physchopath's review.. good Lord. I really wouldn't pay attention to his review.. he looks way too much into a short. If this were a full blown out story in the making then some of the issues might be worth looking into but he could have been a lot more tactful in telling you that. I thought your animation was good.. of course there are better "smoother" animations out there but heck, I thought it was neat and I liked the green glowy guys.. and was sad to see one go =(. Anyways, keep up the good work.
Pretentious, plagiarised & poorly animated
Let's start with the plot; the plot surrounds this "guardian" who's looking for a successor, because why? Why does he need a successor? Is he dying? What prompted him to do this & why is it at all necessary? How about some fucking exposition? Furthermore, why does he check someone's heartbeat to detect their valor? It would have been more intelligent if he had brought a squeegee with him & collected the sweat off the kids forehead just so he could assimilate the kids pheromones, but I guess that wouldn't have been as poetic now would it? Wait, did I say "poetic"? Sorry, I meant "pretentious".
So after he checks his pulse for his valor he decides to take the kid flying over the sea & through the mountains during winter to have a party with all the other aliens... Can anyone say "The Snowman" or "shameless plagiarism"?
The biggest hole of them all is the antagonist, I'm expected to believe that he just sat there the whole time during the guardian's absence just so that he could try & corrupt the guardian's successor, because why? Ignoring the sheer lack of exposition & motivation, this has to be the dumbest tactic for tying to attack your enemy ever.
Let's analyze this, surely the guardian couldn't have found his chosen successor on his first try, if that was conceivable then why would he have to check your pulse to evaluate you? So obviously this took him more than one try to accomplish. Additionally, let's consider the matter of distance, obviously he had to travel far & wide to find each possible successor because he chose a secluded area to make camp. The antagonist has every opportunity to drag his ass over to the pine tree & steal the oracle or whatever it is. So, why doesn't he? If the guardian is his enemy then why not strike when he's most vulnerable? He can't possibly be scared of the guardian, he outright assaulted and took him down with a spear within the first few seconds of their fight. Why does he give a shit about corrupting the guardian's successor? Sorry, but 'adding insult to injury' is only as poetic as it is intelligent, by which I mean it's pretentious; why would he expect the kid to listen to him? He ruined his party and potentially killed his buddies, the kid couldn't possibly find any benefit in listening to a guy who had already fucked him once, furthermore, the reasoning he gave to him is just retarded; "Take it, think of the power!" doesn't make any sense in this context, it's not like the kid has used it at all before and understands the depth of it's power, so the temptation aspect is completely absent. Additionally, if the antagonist really does have an understanding of the the oracle's depth & dynamic of power, why would he try to hand it over to the successor of his enemy and not try and take it for himself? I would understand if the author was against using dialogue to convey exposition, giving effort to try & keep the plot implied through visuals for the artistic challenge such as "The Masquerade" by Pahgawk, but NWL gives dialogue to the antagonist through text so that excuse is out the window immediately. Exposition would be nice.
Another thing I hate about this short is the protagonist. He's some useless fuck who does nothing & conveys no personality traits of interest; he's a Mary Sue character. I'd get about as emotionally invested with a used condom as I would with this kid, I wouldn't want him as a guardian of any kind considering how he stood idly by & watched as his sole defender got roflstomped & killed in front of him, which was the point where I stopped giving a shit about the protagonist's safety entirely; not only is he a schmuck & a vapid Mary Sue, he's also a coward. Fuck him.
The animation is crap, most of it is composed of 3 frame loops & unfinished ones at that, I think the core problem isn't the tool in use but rather the person using it; others such as TheSwain have shown competence in using the brush tool for animation, but NWL obviously struggled in using it & it shows; big gaps between frames & no shading to speak of. I recommend the line tool for future use.
Haha, I've been waiting for a review like this, didn't expect it to be so long though. Well here are my two cents on this. You sir, look into things too deeply! I mean seriously, I get that there are plot holes in it, I get that some things don't make sense, but I guess your too uptight for that kind of stuff. What I was expecting from this was some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism. All I got out of this was "I recommend the line tool for future use." Yeah, could have told me that BEFORE your novel of bitching about "oooh this thing doesn't make sense! I'm going to bitch and moan about it and make the author feel like a dumbass!"
But, regardless, you are correct on a lot of things. Yes, my lines are crap. Yes, the story doesn't make sense if you look at it in a realistic perspective. But think this, a lot of cartoons don't make sense if you look at it in a realistic perspective.
Well, I admire your trolling skills and view on cartoons, but in the end, you lost.
Have a nice day!
Gave me shivers, I specially loved the part where the music syncs with the fairy violin player. I'll go on and check your other stuff. Thanks for this animation :D.