No animation?

The art was good, and the custom start screen was pretty cool. I really feel that you could of had a good short with this if you narrated and added some movement. The white text was difficult to read, maybe a text box at the bottom would be better?

Just saying, you could go somewhere with this flash.

Flash Movie?

This could only be a flash animation if it had more images to go with the story. As it is, pretty boring.