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my first animation.. EVER

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okay, so I just learned how to use Flash... today..
so Im like the worlds biggest newbie, but I'll work my butt off to improve!

constructive critism is loved.

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Incredible animation. I really liked the fluid to bunny shape and than decay/fall apart. The hair rosing like a flower was really nice I would never come up with that idea :=



Notbad

Well this ws something nifty and different I like the drawing side of it but this could be so much better with some color some audio or music and also think about adding a "STOP-ACTION-CODE" to stop the looping.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
This would be alot better with some added audio and or sound/fx, no sound at all kinda just brings the quality down, so add something of sound and you have a wide selecion in the audio portal at your desposal. It seemed like an interesting idea on it's own, but it was rather short, which took away from the humor a bit,This was really short, so maybe adding more to it and or adding more short clips to this entry making it a longer more fuller flash submission, so its an idea. maybe adding a few short ones on this one entry would be a better choice. So i see that this movie starts and loops, you can fix that with a stop action code, what that does is stop the loop and it will play when the user/viewer clicks on the play button, now you should have a play button and a replay button aswell, anyways just an idea to make this better.

~X~



not bad

now all you need to do is add some colour and less detail in the drawings because drawing detailed frame by frame animations can take a long time to complete, and add an interesting plot to it and put in some comedy and you have yourself a new newgrounds winner, oh yeah and some sound of course =D good luck
oh yeah and make it short not too long
if you do this your looking at a 3.5-4.5 rating


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Wow!

This is a great animation for your first try. Much better than mine I might add xD
Keep up the good work! :)



shoot better than mine.

My first animation was horrible!!!!! So what if it was short and has no music or sfx or anything, this is a great start! And it seems like you are a very talented artist as well! I WANT to see more from you, and I don't think you will improve, I KNOW you will improve! You have a lot of potential!


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Views
3,203
Votes
280
Score
2.70 / 5.00

Uploaded
Nov 6, 2011
2:32 PM EST
Genre
Experimental
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