It's hard to rate something so incomplete... why didn't you just wait until it was finished to upload it? There's very little content here, and it looks to be a straight rip-off of Frankenstein. I can't tell if you were going to have a twist or a punchline or what.
Multiple typos (unfished, afterword, opertunity) are a nuisance, but the main thing that kills it is the terrible synth voice. It's the most nauseating thing I've ever heard. Just speak the lines yourself! Literally any voice in the world would be better than that tinny, computer speech.
Don't Upload It Then
Well, i mean, you dont need to submit it in time for halloween, but you could also submit any time, but it was ok. I would like to see what continues this.