Surreal and sublime!

I'm usually no fan of flash comics due to the slideshows known as Thamesis, Broken Saints, and Faux. However, rather than go the 'motion' comic approach, you chose to make it more like a regular print comic. A wise decision on your behalf, Celx.

When it comes to the art, I really like the style that you drew this in. It's really whimsical and a fresh breath of air in a pool of anime/Ren & Stimpy/Simpsons imitators. Plus, I also like the use of subliminal text in the background, along with the 'one color, multiple shades' approach. However, I suggest that you increase the contrast between values because the panels can be hard to read at times. Also, I bet if you teamed up with someone who is really good at animating, this could end up in the Top 50. The music was well chosen as it helped set the mood that you were aiming for. On the other hand, I think that you could have used a few more songs from the Audio Portal. (Try Arnas, Helbereth, AukeSam, and Obsidian Snow.) As for the content, it really shows that you have the mind of a storywriter. I haven't checked out Cooljaw, but this series has a sense of originality and the presentation is excellent. Surprisingly better than many of those flash cartoons that have 4.00 scores, but have terrible plotlines.

Likes:
-Original
-Nice art style
-Clever music selection
-Great atmosphere
-Well written

Dislikes:
-Needs stronger value contrast.
-The fact that this is a Flash comic.
-Could have used a few more songs.

Overall: Celx, as said before, I bet if you teamed up with a really good animator, this will have a much higher score. Here's an eight on my behalf. (I originally was going to give this a seven, but you get a one point boost for something that was a great read.)

Good

I think it's a bit strage that a school kid is interrogated by two detectives only because of a missing rabbit.

Anyway, I noticed a slightly different font in the speech bubbles (or did the speech bubbles always had that font? It's quite some time since I read the last episode, heh), which is a lot better to read.

I also like the "subliminal messages" you include in the background, like the question marks when one detective asks a question or the "fucking lies" when Maple lies.

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Still impressive

I really like your somewhat surreal design of characters and backgrounds. It really goes with the story.

The story itself is very well-done. It's quite deep, detailed, and somewhat original.

The colors you've used are nice, but don't really fit the setting at all times. I do appreciate that you've used the same color palette throughout, very nicely done.

The animation really adds to it, makes it more than just a comic. Animated speech bubbles and so forth. I see there's a track select button, but it's only the one looping track or nothing. Music is very nice though, I'm glad you added it, it wouldn't be as immersive without it. Maybe try to loop it better, though?

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Menu at the bottom looks really good, and works well. Might be a bit difficult to read it

Good.

I liked it, even tough the artwork doesnt go in deep detail I really like your art style. It also seems to fit in some wacky way. Also the story is intresting.

I'll be sure to check the next "episode"

Creative as usual

Well I find the art style has remained unchanged as has the music. They are both still great though so that is good to know. How long do you spend drawing each frame anyways?

The story seems to have thicken. The innocent rabbit she had killed from before is an endangered species. Quite a plot twist that is. That and she is trying to keep the fact that she killed it a secret for now as well. Wonder what will be happening to her next.

Overall, the plot has thickened.

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