It's pretty good for a newbie..?
And, just one question.
Why do you cut off the Newgrounds Logo..? I kinda feel proud with it in my submissions and it's quite, no good to crop it off like that..You're using the preloader NG made after all.
Well this don't mean to be offensive, 'cuz in Tom had also said feel free to edit the preloaders he offers.
Good luck, and improve. I suggest ya to add voice acting.