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That Bitch

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i comepletly disagre on the actual video
That Bitch!
this is my second flash :D and there are some glitches (lag etc)
but i codnt fix it cuz im a noob
please help this noob out and give me advise
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theres this one other guy that help with a song but i dint know how to put him on the credit area
his name is
El3ctrodude
http://el3ctrodude.newgro unds.com/
music non-ap

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Good Work

As with any of my free advice, it's usually worth what you pay for it. However, I liked this. The story is a great concept and I thought the action and the score were combined in an effective way. There could be advantages in making it much shorter, for one thing, it would give you more time to iron out the technical issues you are having with Flash. Another thing you may want to do is to develop the characters more by adding details to their faces. For example, giving the puppy eyes with moving pupils would allow you to create a character that is more alive without adding greatly to the animation workload.

I look forward to the next one.

Roberto

XQchris responds:

thanks ill defenetly will try doing that on my next flash :3

Current Score: 2.40 / 5.00 (+ 0.039)

Didn't really understand most of it, but it was pretty fun to watch. Like some other reviews said, some parts were a little longer than they should have been, and it should have had some sound effects. But it's pretty nice overall. Especially for a second flash.

XQchris responds:

k ill try and make other flash cartoons shorter (on really long parts)

Hahaha wonderful concept

Great idea, the only issue (aside from the amateur animation) was some parts lasted a bit longer than they should. Like the dog coming out of the water. You could also use some sound effects. Findsounds dot com has some nice ones for freeee

XQchris responds:

tanks for the link :3

This was pretty good :D

There was a little bit of a background story, the plot was great, i noticed some dbz in there xD i liked it! I'm gonna give you an 8 because I havent seen something that well plotted here on newgrounds in a while :P Just work on your animation skills and making some of the scenes less drawn out and you're good!

XQchris responds:

tanks i did take a few weeks to come up with the story

Pretty good second flash

Even if it was an amateur flash, I liked the way you were able to portray a background story for the dog, that really added depth to the character, rather than just making a regular old fight scene. The flash itself is decent, and except for the part with the girl's arm not being attached to her body, and the part where she's shown turning in a 2 dimensional format, you did a good job.

XQchris responds:

tanks for the review and advise