Good But Needs Improvement.

The drawing was rather choppy in places, although there were some good examples which I liked as well, suggesting more rushed drawing rather than lack of talent on your part. You could easily improve the appearance by colouring all the scenes. The story was interesting but was quite short and lacked character development.

I would also like to see more interactivity with the story in the next chapter, as it is more of a movie than a game at the moment. Despite some of the flaws, I can't help but like this, and hope to see the next chapter soon.

This was good...

But, it still needs a little workthe drawing were a bit crude, and the story was little hastily done (no real back story or character development) Maybe a Character Bio Page before the comic would be useful. But I like it, the plot is pretty good, and I love the concept. I would love to see what you are capable of when you get better.