I lol'd
This is a very good effort for your first submission and second flash, I would be interested in learning how to create flash art myself.
I got your humour and laughed at a few parts, I also enjoyed the dialogue and the voice actors (you?) have some potential!
I think you have some great ideas and with some more practice you could be doing some serious shit!
Keep up the effort and dont let peeps discourage you with their negative opinions!
Keep it coming mate!