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Hey, I made this in about 3-4 hours so enjoy. And I'm only 11 so please give me feedback on things to improve on in the animation.
The music is by Parry Gripp: http://www.parrygripp.com /
a thousand times better
alot smoother than your other animations and the cartoony style is what i prefer to something really complicated. Keep it up cartoonwar, im expecting great things from you PS: Could you do a video for a different song? I wasn't a big fan of this music
It wasn't too bad!
K first off I want to start by saying, telling people that you are 11 years old is not going to cut you any slack. Most people, like me, don't review based on age, and some people even review harsher.
Alright, the video was not bad. :) I liked some of the way you carried out the flash. Like the scene with the iphone where the view is directed toward the ground, is, in my opinion pure genius.
However, there are some things that really bugged me, like (and this has be said before, and I'm pretty sure your tiered of it) the art, witch isn't the worst, but would look better cleaned up, shaded, etc.
Another thing that bugged me was the fact that you didn't draw the girl in that one scene. Don't be afraid to draw women XD!
and I don't like Perry Gipp's music, but that's just my opinion, so you can keep him if you want.
But hey, your movies are practically overflowing with potential. So keep them coming. :)
Also, score doesn't matter people don't have an exact reason to why they gave you what score they gave you. What really counts is making the flash, getting feed back, and the rest.
So yah... sorry for the long review, but I really hope you read it! XD
it could really use some work.
First off, the song choice is okay. Next, the art, its clearly rushed, and pretty bad. The houses are ridiculous. Are houses really that close together? are their windows that big? are they connected to the sidewalk with no driveway? no. You should really put more time into this stuff. Their is some really lazy stuff in here. You reuse a lot of the animation, and there is a lot of spots that have nothing happening, (I thought it froze when there was the closeup on the guys face after he winked at the girl) show the girl giving him a discouraging look, show the people watching the tv, show him reaching into his pocket, etc, etc etc...
keep working on it.
kinda sucks how i actually dont have any money right now and i watched this ... but i must say it was good for what it is , hopefully we get our money soon :D
tis funny young one!! I love the song alot. This happened to a friend of mine.
lol, thanks! :)
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