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My very first flash ever

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Dec 5, 2010 | 12:00 PM EST

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This is my very first flash that I made. I'm sure it won't be a trouble. Please do not post mean reviews (Example: You suck just like your mom!) Post nice reviews and if you actually post mean reviews on my very first flash I will be mean to you.

By the way if this flash can get good ratings then I will change the title.



Rated 5 / 5 stars

3 words

star wars music

Flashmaker2010 responds:

You liked the Star wars music?


Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

What the...?

Entirely understandable for a first try, but don't just dive straight in and throw it onto Newgrounds with hopes that people won't be "mean" to you. And your childish reply isn't helping... "If you actually post mean reviews on my very first flash I will be mean to you." That is just pathetic. Don't expect lots of sympathy coming your way because its your first flash. What you should do is practice for months, maybe years if necessary, watch LOTS of tutorials, and study the flashes you see on the front page. Do any of them have looping basic moving matchstick animations with Windows Narrator as voices? Of course not. Practice, practice, practice. Until you genuinely believe that your flash is on par with the stuff you adleast see on the frontpage. Alls I'm asking you to do is to work hard. If you don't, and just keep churning the same shit as this onto Newgrounds, you may as well just give up. Adleast next time, draw fleshed out characters. Give them skin, hair, clothes. Ways of differentiating men from women. Alls you've got are different colour blobs with eyes and a mouth that cycles through 3 frames of animation for movement. Next time, use your voice for the characters, or get one of your friends, or even someone off Newgrounds to do the voices - and make sure they are loud enough to be heard. Make background music quiet, and have it quieten down further when people are talking. Keep sound effects a small bit quieter than the voices also.
I'm no expert at Flash, man, but even if I did know how to use it, I'd know when my stuff is good enough to submit to the Flash portals. So I'll say it again - work on your skills for a good while until your stuff is actually worth posting. This video is a good first attempt at Flash, but not a good first video to post.

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Flashmaker2010 responds:

Thank you for your tips.


Rated 1 / 5 stars


I highly suggested watching the Flash tutorials on Newgrounds under the Collections page. Also I couldn't tell where the characters were at so improving the backgrounds to make that clear would help.

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Flashmaker2010 responds:

I think you are right maybe I should watch a Flash tutorial.


Rated 1.5 / 5 stars

Need work

I didn't understand the story, or the background :S need more work

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Flashmaker2010 responds:

That's alright I will try better next time.


Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

Fair Enough

Fair enough for a first flash, I know there's a bunch of programs that make flash these days, but if you're using flash professional, then maybe add an action script on your last frame so the movie doesn't restart with the starwars music. Oh yeah, and a preloader will be good :)

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Flashmaker2010 responds:

Okay I will use a preloader the next time I submit another flash.