it had a good plot to begin with but what didn't allow me to give it 10/10 was that most of the music didn't feel like it belonged there and it sounded a little bit disoriented. still great though.
I'll start with what I feel could be improved. The drawing was a bit rough. I do not know if this is intentional, if you still perfecting your drawing skills, or you just do not have good drawing skills. This is not meant as a slight. Most of us (self included) can't draw. The sound mixing was probably the portion that needed the most improvement. Some of the sound had a fair amount of distortion, and I don't think it was part of the story. What worked for me is the story telling and the way it was animated. This is a good set-up for the next part, and I would look forward to seeing it. The animation created a sense of disorientation, which added to the eerie feel of the story.
I think if you improved some of the production aspects, you could turn out flash that would consistently rate between 8 and 10.