Maybe there's something here...
...but it's hard to tell. I wouldn't mind the crude animation if there was more going on. For a piece where the animation techniques are so simple, I'm surprised you couldn't have made it longer, given it some dialog to explain what is happening, and checked your subtitles for spelling and grammar errors. Your art style is OK. It's not great, but I've certainly seen worse. You could overcome the crude art by developing and better animating the piece.