Nice.

My only concern is that the characters look a little too small. Try increasing the size by about 125% at least. You do want to keep the size of the background consistent with the size of the characters. Other than that, this is really good. I see a lot of potential for this series. If you aren't going to put in voice actors, try to but in buttons so that people can proceed the text when they want to. I am usually here if you need some help.

On another note, is this basically the story of Megaman Zero or something different? Just curious, because it seems like you skipped the elf wars completely, but then again, capcom did a piss poor job with that story.

Much better

This is a big improvement over what you submitted yesterday. The only thing I didn't like about this one was the song at the end, but I'm nitpicking. I hope to see more from you soon.

-ffc Squall

very good

i thot it was a little awkward at the beginning with the 2 preloads and the awkward introductory dialougue
the dialougue in general was a little fast for my taste
but even so it had very well performed effects and the story has a very... wats the word... deep meaning i look forward to the next one