Shattered Heaven Act 4.2

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Scene 2 of Act 4.

Also note I use a play button for the first time in a long time haha...yeah. I do listen sometimes lol.

Brief: Solus Saevio, Serenity Credo and Forza Devinco begin their first mission on Earth. Little do they know this is the last moment of peace that they will have together for a long time.

Act 4 "Conflict"

After the initial attacks on the Angel facilities have died down, Gail issues an recon mission on a facility believed to be a cell belonging to Demetrius' terrorist organization. Solus, Serenity, Forza, Keira and Lenard encounter heavy resistance upon their arrival. All the while, Adam Novus has made up his mind on how he will play in the fight for the future of the world.

Adam Novus: nikedrummer33
Sharon Amare: Mochan
Stephen Novus: Stephen Alonso
Ashley Bellelus: Mippa
Mario Liberalis: Mysticshinhanku
Heather Pertencia: candi
Luscious Malum: Aramek
Gail Contandino: Photoshoptimeryan
Solus Saevio: clwinston
Forza Devinco: Sfox
Serenity Credo: Rina-chan/Haushinka
Chris Procella: Dymatrex
Keira Sequor: Merodi
Leo Ombra: Leo Rubino
Amy: Lira Tao
Animus Pravelo: Bwoods
Demetrius Libertas: Russ
Lenard Shaw: Edwyn
Yuna Innitor: Hnilmik
Elaine Libre: Scarlotte
Freya Abby: Mirielle
Christina Effloresco: Sapphire
Jen Fama: Catoni15
Sean Repens: Rebelcheese
Mike Aquilis: Sonicmega
Marius: bomberman61
Rose Amare: Exdevlin


Part of me is enjoying the pacing, the other isnt.

To clarify, when I look back on this series, it seems to open up just too quickly without much back story (albeit this is based off a novel you've written before.) I feel as if there could be more explanation to whats going on.

Though the part of me that enjoys the pacing, feels that for a sequel stand point, this is great. As were still exploring our enemy, developing our characters, and setting the tone for this series.

Your voice actors (in this segment), are doing just fine, I alwasy enjoy it when they're doing more than reading blankly from a script. The ambiance is there, those slight beeps, atmospheric whoosh, paint the scene perfectly. There could always be more, but one should never over do it.

All in all, great short, keep em' coming.

Note: Of course, I already know these can be watched as full episodes on your website, so I've had an easier time following through than most maybe. It might be a good idea to make a note of that in each short. Just a thought.

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nikedrummer33 responds:

Yeah I do, I always did and people still want to see it as a stand alone. And I understand what you mean by jumping right into it. I used the first scene of Act 4 to give a quick flash back in terms of what happened in the 3rd book. Not in depth but enough to paint a slight picture of the situation the world is currently in.

A lot of it was my fault, as I was writing the scripts like I would write the novels. Where it's more character development through the dialogue and such. I learned my lesson with the first few episodes that, the type of writing does not translate well to an episodic flash series >_>. This episode though, which is expected to be completely finished by October is going to be a lot more fun.

And the scripts to come 5 and up I actually included direction, another mistake I made in the past, I never gave direction to the VAs, just was like "here's a script" lawl. That's my bad. But it improves. The first two scenes of this are the shortest. The next one will probably be massive.

Too Short

This series actually do have some potential but each submission is too short. Rather than cutting up in scenes you should just keep them in acts or make them longer. I'm sure this will attract more people and keep their interest going as i believe people won't just want to watch an entirely talking scene.
It needs more advancing plot development.

Other than that the drawings are pretty decent.
Just hope you can work on the pacing and the contents in each of the short.
Good luck in future episodes. :)

nikedrummer33 responds:

Full episodes are usually 30 minutes. They're way too long file size wise to put up here and each episode will usually be longer than the 16,000 frame limit. The pacing is actually fine, but seems much slower when it's posted scene by scene.

This episode is different, there's only 3 scenes script wise but will probably cut into more for size restraints.

I put up each entire episode, full format on my site. Watching it together as a single episode is how to properly watch them, but I put them up on NG scene by scene as I finish each one. Script wise the first 3 Acts were relatively slow in terms of action in compared to 4 and up.

I write this as I wrote the novels, so character development is usually shown through the dialogue, etc. But like I said, watching it as a singular episode kinda kills that slow pacing. But I understand how it feels slow since no matter what I say, as long as each scene is posted individually people will take them as single entries. But until I find a way to submit an entire 30 minute episode in one shot it'll have to be done this way. I have some ideas on how to pull it off, but I'm not entirely sure it'll work on NG.

But yeah, this episode is unique in how the first two scenes are short, though the first scene of each episode is usually about the same length before the opening. The 3rd scene itself, considering its content is about 15 minutes on its own.

not bad

It was decent character drawings but everything could use some touch ups. The characters often felt unfinished and sketched in and there needs to be more effort put into the backgrounds. Voice actors were fine but I would kick out Omadon his voice is terrible for any role. Good luck in the future!

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4.18 / 5.00

Aug 22, 2010
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